Writing names the world, and the power of description should not be underestimated. Literature remembers its religious origins in some of those first stories. Stories of sky gods and sea gods not only became the source of an ocean of stories that flowed from them but also served as the foundations of the world into which they, the myths, were born. There would have been little blood sacrifice in Latin America or ancient Greece if it had not been for the gods. Iphigenia would have lived and Clytemnestra would have had no need to murder Agamemnon and the entire story of the House of Atreus would have been different. This would have been bad for the history of the theater, no doubt, but good in many ways for the family concerned. Writing invented the gods and was a game the gods themselves played, and the consequences of that writing, holy writ, are still working themselves out today, which just shows that the demonstrable fictionality of fiction does nothing to lessen its power, especially if you call it the truth. But writing broke away from the gods and in that rupture much of its power was lost. Prophecy is no longer the game, except for futurologists, but then futurology is fiction too. It can be defined as the art of being wrong about the future. For the rest of us, the proper study of mankind is man. We have no priests, we can appeal to no ultimate arbiter, though there are critics among us who would claim such a role for themselves.In spite of this, fiction does retain the occasional surprising ability to initiate social change. Here is the fugitive slave Eliza, running from Simon Legree. Here is Oliver Twist asking for more. Here is a boy wizard with a lightning scar on his forehead bringing books back into the lives of a generation that was forgetting how to read. Uncle Tom’s Cabin changed attitudes towards slavery, and Charles Dickens’s portraits of child poverty inspired legal reforms, and J. K. Rowling changed the culture of childhood, making millions of boys and girls look forward to 800-page novels, and probably popularizing vibrating toy broomsticks at boarding schools. On the opening night of Death of a Salesman, the head of Gimbels department store rushed from the theater vowing never to fire his own aging Willy Loman.April
Really good novels don’t have everything on the page
Sometimes what you leave out is as important as what you include.
From the archives:
One trick to keep writing tight and vivid is to avoid expositional dialogue. Find advice for achieving this in my archives. (I’ve written a lot here.)
Along those lines, here’s a piece I wrote on Subtlety.
And here’s advice about using characters’ eyes and expressions to add meaning and emotion without shouting at your readers. Luckily, it’s relatively easy, especially when you pay attention to expressions while you’re consuming dramas and wandering through your days. When you’re reading good fiction, I hope you’re keeping a notebook nearby to jot down bits you’d like to emulate. I regularly jot down facial expressions, emotional reactions to dialogue and events, gestures, body language, potent language, and figurative language.
Keep writing, keep dreaming, have heart
Who Inspires You?
Last July The New York Times David Marchese featured a delicious interview with the multi-talented, British creative Phoebe Waller-Bridge that I
recommend because it captures a point in her career while she’s sought-after and succeeding with exciting new ventures. Whilst she has had a storied career, bejeweled with Emmy statues and accolades, who would have guessed she’d end up acting in and writing for the lastest Indiana Jones movie?
Not this fan. I’ve loved her since her series Fleabag aired which she wrote and starred in. According to Marchese Fleabag was “ribald, form-breaking, swoon-inducing show she created and starred in.”
Fleabag also won 6 Emmys and was nominated for 11 in its second season. It’s about grief and how to handle life when things really fall apart. It’s hilarious.
I’ve been writing more lately and realizing I want to be inspired by risk-taking artistic projects, especially of the storytelling kind. And their creators. So I’m going to rewatch the series because it fits the bill and it was orginally based on a one-woman show she performed at the Edinburgh Fringe Festival. Next
weekend I’m attending a local play, Eleanor where one actress is going to play multiple parts. And I’m wildly curious about the screenplay and how actress Margie Boule is going to pull it off. As in at least one of the parts she’s playing is male. The play depicts the life and passions of Eleanor Roosevelt, someone who has always inspired me.
Lately, I’ve been reading more than one book at a time, and am so enjoying singer-songwriter Mary Gauthier’s memoir, Saved by a Song. The subtitle is: The Art and Healing Power of Songwriting and I’m learning a lot about the slow and painstaking process.
I’ve also become a a fangirl of suspense writer Jamie Mason. Her debut mystery Three Bags Full had me up reading in the middle of the night while hooting and chortling. It’s so full of twists and oddballs and wordsmithery and I cannot recommend it enough. You might want to study the magic she creates with figurative language. Her second novel, Monday’s Lie is much different and also wildly fresh. Interestingly, there’s a dead character in the story and it’s simply fabulous how much we come to know her. And how she looms over the story.
And more often these days my house is filled with music, including Mary Gauthier’s Rifles and Rosary Beads, in which she features combat vets. Mostly, I’m just paying closer attention to who and what feeds me; a theme for this year.
In the Times interview Waller-Bridge reveals how the creative projects she’s been involved with include the ‘rascals’ she admires. Because she so enjoys the complexity and handiwork of anti-heroes, don’t-fit-the-mold types. As do I. After Fleabag came the oh-so naughty, bizarre, and edgy spy-thriller Killing Eve which she wrote and directed. Not too many TV series around that feature female assassins. Lately, besides her role in Indiana Jones and the Dial of Destiny, she contributed to the screenplay for the latest James Bond film, No Time to Die and is occupied with a video game based on Tomb Raider. And I loved the place in the interview where she said, and that writer is with me everywhere I go.
So, my questions to writers out there: who inspires you?
Keep writing, keep dreaming and may the writer within you go everywhere with you.
Oh, and I recently came upon this advice that I want to pass along: Sit with the warrriors. The conversation is more interesting.
Writing Prompt
Francetta Bridle, A Walk in the Snow. I post a lot of paintings on Facebook to invite discussion and mostly to provide balm in these difficult times. I asked friends what they saw in her posture because it’s so intriguing. And they mentioned purposeful, end in sight, brisk, brave, tension in her shoulders. It’s a story, isn’t it?And I’m a little worried about her footware.
Four Words
LET YOUR THEMES WHISPER
And you can find in-depth information on using themes in fiiction and memoir here.
Keep writing, Keep dreaming, Have heart
Salman Rushdie: Writing Names the World
Writing names the world, and the power of description should not be underestimated. Literature remembers its religious origins in some of those first stories. Stories of sky gods and sea gods not only became the source of an ocean of stories that flowed from them but also served as the foundations of the world into which they, the myths, were born. There would have been little blood sacrifice in Latin America or ancient Greece if it had not been for the gods. Iphigenia would have lived and Clytemnestra would have had no need to murder Agamemnon and the entire story of the House of Atreus would have been different. This would have been bad for the history of the theater, no doubt, but good in many ways for the family concerned. Writing invented the gods and was a game the gods themselves played, and the consequences of that writing, holy writ, are still working themselves out today, which just shows that the demonstrable fictionality of fiction does nothing to lessen its power, especially if you call it the truth. But writing broke away from the gods and in that rupture much of its power was lost. Prophecy is no longer the game, except for futurologists, but then futurology is fiction too. It can be defined as the art of being wrong about the future. For the rest of us, the proper study of mankind is man. We have no priests, we can appeal to no ultimate arbiter, though there are critics among us who would claim such a role for themselves.In spite of this, fiction does retain the occasional surprising ability to initiate social change. Here is the fugitive slave Eliza, running from Simon Legree. Here is Oliver Twist asking for more. Here is a boy wizard with a lightning scar on his forehead bringing books back into the lives of a generation that was forgetting how to read. Uncle Tom’s Cabin changed attitudes towards slavery, and Charles Dickens’s portraits of child poverty inspired legal reforms, and J. K. Rowling changed the culture of childhood, making millions of boys and girls look forward to 800-page novels, and probably popularizing vibrating toy broomsticks at boarding schools. On the opening night of Death of a Salesman, the head of Gimbels department store rushed from the theater vowing never to fire his own aging Willy Loman.Resonance Revisited
Another layer of ice arrived last night, which means another day of seclusion in our ongoing storm saga. Next week it’s going to warm up to
the 50s, so hooray for that. But the warmer temperatures won’t revive the many fallen giants around here. Trees, that is. I’ve mentioned them earlier in the week here, but it’s still shocking. The storm’s damage and the human toll saddening, including an elderly man who was killed when a tree crashed through his house. Then trees have ended up in many buildings around here and damages further south in Lane Countyare nearly unbearable.
Yesterday I left my house–the first time since late Friday afternoon. I thought I’d feel exhilerated, but it was mostly harrowing and the sky made of gloom and slate and heavy rain didn’t help. Oh, and the semis creating whiteout conditions on the highway.
But enough weather reporting. I’ve been working and pondering ways to explain emotional resonance to my client.
And found this statement I’ve made in the past: What lingers in your reader’s memory or imagination isn’t necessarily your exact words or phrases, but rather the affect they have. If the words conjure pain, grief, ecstasy, hilarity, or tears in your reader, then they’re working. If they don’t affect the reader, then get rid of them as if you’re a cold-hearted executioner.
Emotional resonance creates depth and empathy in your readers.
Emotional resonance creates insights into your characters and in turn shines a light on what it means to be human. What it feels like. Hurting, screwing up, falling in love, falling out of love, celebrating, saying good-bye.
And as a reminder, here are two articles I’ve written here before on the topic. Here’s a link to the first one, Resonance in case you missed it.
And the second one: A Few More Thoughts on Resonance.
Again, it all begins with language. I’ve been gathering books to donate to a program that resells them then supplies books to needy kids. As I’m going through stacks, I came across two novels in the Dean Koontz Jane Hawk series. Scary, grisly, horrific situation and events of a not-too future time when human monsters have infiltrated institutions and the government. And have the ultimate technology to ruin lives.
These days I don’t have the stomach to read such dark tales, but Koontz, though he overwrites like he’s on a madly drunken spree at times, has drawn a setting and atmosphere so creepy and evil and unforgiving it makes me want to check my door locks and turn on all the lights. In the daytime.
Lest I forget, he’s created a slew of vulnerable,
beautiful characters you so want to survive.
Last night I copied this tidbit from The Crooked Staircase: A dragon’s egg moon emerged from a nest of shredding clouds harried southeast by a high wind that had no presence here at ground level. The oaks were widely separated now, each the majesty of its domain, black-limbed, and cragged and crooked, like the scorched but stalwart survivors of a cataclysm, or oracles warning of some dire event impending. The land grew more inhospitable to grass, and the last upslope as patterned with faint tree-cast moonshadows on a carpet of wet pebbles and scraggly clumps of flattened sedge.
Whew. I’m on edge after reading this, how about you? Now you might be thinking overkill. Or you might have lingered at dragon’s egg moon–but that’s what horror writers do. For a reason.
Did you notice the consonance? Koontz, “I’ve always been in love with out beautiful langauge.”
The resonance in the series comes from many factors including the setting, mood, and atmoshphere as just demonstrated but especially the high stakes. The villians are so cruel, unjust, heinous, ravenously power hungry the reader’s emotions are stirred, unleashed, shaken–you name it. Run Jane, run. And they’ve got freaking nano-technology. Did I mention Jane is a vigilante? Think one-woman army.
While reading the Hawk series I’d made brief notes and underlined words, phrases, passages in the books. Last night I started transferring them to a notebook since I’m donating the books. Because, writer friends, I’m a notebookmaker. Hoping you are too.
Keep writing, keep dreaming, have heart
Imagine your reader arriving jet-legged
It’s another harsh morning here in the Pacific Northwest. We’re still digging out from an arctic storm and brutal winds blasting in from the Columbia River Gorge. The region has a staggering number of trees down crashing into roofs, flattening cars, and taking out power lines. While main thoroughfares are driveable, many roads are still impassable or closed, neighborhoods and thousands of homes without power. Burst pipes all over the place. Note: the trees here that are crashing over are significantly larger and older than the ones in this photo–I can’t find a good image.
I’m homebound, but my power remained on, thank God. It’s going to stay below freezing today and tomorrow afternoon freezing rains are arriving before it warms up–so I’m not putting away my battery-powered lanterns, flashlights, and candles yet. I’ve been wearing layers, working on an editing project, writing, reading The Tenderness of Wolves by Stef Penney (highly recommend), watched the Green Bay Packers defeat the Dallas Cowboys in an especially fun and satisfying victory, and using my oven to help heat the house.
Lands of Belief
Let’s talk about story openings. I believe in the power of stories to enlighten, heal, and transport readers to lands of belief. Developmental editing focuses on the fundamentals of creating a publishable book or story such as structure, pacing, dialogue, character development and arc. It’s collaborative and the suggestions I supply are detailed, doable, and sometimes profound. And I take my role as teacher seriously. I use Track Changes to line edit, insert, and message the writer. I create detailed memos and answer follow-up questions. Thus the changes needed are illustrated in the manuscript. This is how to deepen viewpoint. This is how to write crisper sentences. This is how to bump up dialogue. This is how to slow down for impact and emotional resonance.
This is how you pull readers into the first pages and world of the story and nail them there.
So here’s a little trick: Imagine your readers have arrived at your story as if they’ve traveled far to reach their destination. And are severely jetlagged. You know the feeling: weary, limp, disoriented, overwhelmed, thick-headed. Far from home. Your instincts might be to gently take the reader’s hand and nudge them into the story with a pontification, or murmur, or a vague sense of reality. A featherbed sort of
introduction.
Nix. Nein. Non. Instead immerse your reader via sensory proofs of the story world, with smells and sharply-drawn details, sounds–because sounds are linked to emotions, and, of course, through indelible sights. The more exotic the setting, the more specific and thoughtfully rendered proofs are needed. Readers are witnesses and participants in storytelling. So think layers and texture and complexity woven from your first sentences.
By the time the jetlagged traveler trundles up to his or her hotel room to unpack and freshen up, he or she might be debating if a nap is the best course of action. But no naps allowed. Your tourist-slash-reader needs to leave the hotel, gape into into the harsh morning light, and struggle to hydrate. Maybe browse through a market spotted on the taxi ride from the airport. Or find a cafe for a stomach-settling meal, caffeinated beverage, or people watching. Maybe a stroll along the inviting sea.
And yes this works for stories set in the ordinary world too with or without corpses. If your character is ripped off by a pickpocket upon arrival, the police station might indicate an inadequate budget and outdated equipment. Or it might be be well-lit, efficient, and accomodating to the public. Cops need technology, the building needs an emergancy exit, and the layout will suggest the hierarchy in the department.
Same with the crowded apartment or bungalow, seemingly boring office, or small town.
This also means your opening contains tension–a tantalizing sense of unease. Perhaps a surprise or two. This doesn’t mean the reader {via the character} needs to trip over a corpse or encounter a villain. Although come to think of it, if she strolls along the inviting sea and stumbles over a corpse with his head bashed in… You get the idea–someone or something needs to disturb the opening. It needs threat.
However, your first pages don’t always need an opening salvo, as in bombardment or barrage. Fictional (and memoir) openings might suggest or even whisper that things are not quite right as might happen in literary fiction. But there are underlying disturbances in play. Disturb is a good word to remember about openings. No matter your genre.
Or you could portray a seemingly perfect or delightful situation that goes haywire–after you’ve supplied a brief honeymoon. You’ve got endless options to shake up your reader. And no matter that your jetlagged reader needs a wee nap. Or to drop onto the bed and succomb to dreamland. But not yet. Not yet.











